Very well done
Ignore the comment below,
except for 'freaking' the lyrics were fluid and well done.
My only advice would be to push your voice harder next time. Try and hit some higher notes on the ends especially on the ee sounds and near the end. I'm not saying ball splittingly high just work it louder and harder and it will convey your emotions and make it a much stronger song, because at some points it felt like you were just reading it and not feeling it. And I think thats not true.
Good luck
Great song